1. You should lump all imperialist endeavors together — the 1400s were not the


1. You should lump all imperialist endeavors together — the 1400s were not the same as the 1800s. Motives and methods were different. I appreciate you trying to give context in your intro, but you need to stay on topic: late 19th/early 20th centuries.
2. I don’t see a thesis in your intro. Your whole argument depends on a clear thesis.
3. This was not a research paper assignment, but an exercise in argument formation — you did not need to use outside sources.
4. Need to be specific about when and why. Your second paragraph begins with no sense of timing and motives. The Industrial Rev is key — causing European demand for cheap raw material and new markets.
5. “British rule in India was uneventful”??? Wow. That is offensive to Indians, and just plain false. Britain ruled India for almost 200 years. You need to analyze what they did there, how it affect the people, and how it compares to Africa & Latin Am.
6. You need to follow the Checklist.
7. You did not cover Latin Am at all.
Overall, a strong start, but no thesis and you did not fulfill the actual assignment: compare / contrast different forms of imperialism.


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